F. Scott Fitzgerald characterizes Gatsby as forthcoming and genuine in his interactions with Nick. Unlike Gatsby’s usual guests who arrived without invitation, Nick was “one of the few guests who had actually been invited.” This adds to the notion that Gatsby is reaching out to Nick in order to satiate an ulterior motive. At a private luncheon, Gatsby goes to great lengths to reveal details about his personal life in order to gain Nick’s respect, building his own credibility as an honest, trustworthy man. Readers soon learn Gatsby’s goal is to manipulate Nick into a reunion with his second cousin—and Gatsby’s long-lost love—Daisy Buchanan; nonetheless, the opposite effect is created, for he becomes a desperate fool hungry for affection.
Fluent and focused! :o)
In the second sentence, maintain the present tense:
"Unlike Gatsby's usual guests who ARRIVE without invitation, Nick IS "one of the few guests who had actually been invited."
Overall, nicely done! Keep it up, kiddos!
Thank you for the corrections! ILY
F. Scott Fitzgerald effectively illustrates Gatsby’s sorrows through the consistent use of the color blue. As Nick narrates Gatsby’s garden, he emphasizes the melancholic notion that exists throughout the chaos of “men and girls [coming] and [going] like moths”. By depicting a sense of solitude, the readers are able to justify that Gatsby’s life has always lacked stable relationships; hence, causing Gatsby to continue his secluded lifestyle. Carraway’s elaborate description of Daisy’s “hair laying like a dash of blue paint across her cheek” further proves that she as well is filled with loneliness and grief without Gatsby. As the orator paints the picture of despair the color blue serves as a representation of the desolation that Gatsby is feeling. The readers can further understand that his self alienation is caused by the lack of Daisy’s presence in his life.
Girls, you've definitely exhibited insight here.
I appreciate your connection between Gatsby's blues and Daisy with the last quote in your PEEEEL.
Be careful with GPS. Remember, semi-colons unite two complete sentences:
"By depicting a sense of solitude, readers realize that Gatsby’s life has lacked stable relationships; hence, Fitzgerald presents Gatsby as a man doomed to a life of seclusion."
In the second sentence, "As Nick narrates Gatsby’s garden" will be more effectively expressed "As Nick describes" or "As Nick details..." "Narrat[ing] the garden" is awkwardly worded.
Still, you are focused on elaborating upon the effects and that's what Cambridge--and I--want! :o)
Fitzgerald’s presentation of the “Great” Gatsby as a Houdini in his own right suggests that his enormous mansion and garden parties are all but an illusionarium for Gatsby’s elaborate act. Gatsby’s elusive slight of hand allows his true persona to disappear before his guests’ very eyes, ultimately securing his position as the master of his extravagant show as he is the only one who knows the entire truth. His detached and enigmatic façade leaves his visitants under false pretenses that he could have “once killed a man” or have been a “German spy during the war.” By fastening his houseguests in a tug-of-war debate over his true origins, Gatsby effectively ensures they will ogle his lovely assistant, deception, while the true magic occurs right under their very noses. Not privy to the naked eye, Fitzgerald reveals Gatsby to be “really just a man” and thus pulls the curtain on his biggest trick. However, Gatsby, the master of illusion, assures that no onlooker shall uncover the man behind the mask because a great magician never reveals his secrets.
Girls, the way you extended your metaphor is both fluent and insightful.
This is an excellent example of the P (personal approach) that Cambridge looks for in the top band.
Thank you, Madame 😊💖
Fitzgerald envelops the atmosphere around Gatsby to be very mysterious and uncertain as to emphasize his blank character. Gatsby’s lavish parties were teeming with uninvited guests, that “[Gatsby] didn’t know” because “no one was ever invited to Gatsby’s” parties they just “show up”, and by the same token “no one knows Jay Gatsby.” So there’s a host with a house full of blank faces and guests left in the dark about their host; and Nick sees the impact of the illustrious host’s reclusive nature as people begin to speculate his life, his personality, and his character-with the facts being mixed with the rumors into a cornucopia of confusion and dis-credibility. With the atmosphere tingling in uncertainty, the known knowledge of Jay Gatsby are skewed and morphed to not just continue, but also to expand his mysterious persona.
The first sentence "... as to emphasize his blank character" does not make sense to me. Actually, the GPS is a little confusing but let's focus on what your point is. Gatsby has anything but a blank character. Perhaps changing it to "Fitzgerald envelops Gatsby in an opaque shroud of puzzling mystery to illustrate his enigmatic character." Short and to the point so you can elaborate further in the next sentences. Also, starting a sentence with "so there's a host" seems too informal for a PEEL. Try to be more formal like saying "Gatsby, a host inhabiting a mansion with blank faces,..."
Well put, Brenda!
Matos, Matt, & Arian:
The first sentence stumped me too. Part of the issue is the wording at the beginning. The author cannot envelop the atmosphere, but he can envelop (wrap, enclose, surround) Gatsby.
Grammatically, remember semi-colons join two complete sentences:
"...host; and Nick..." is incorrect because a ; is equivalent to an and. Essentially, you've said "and and."
Still, in addressing the atmosphere, you are discussing mood which is important and often overlooked.
In The_Great_Gatsby, F. Scott Fitzgerald exposes the solitude involved with living in an artificial society. Nick's depiction of Gatsby's lavish party feels as though Gatsby is the most beloved man in the city, however, when Jay Gatsby is seen through Nick's honest eyes, the reader notices that "no one swooned backward on Gatsby" as the girls did with other men and "no singing quartets were formed with Gatsby's head." This clarifies that, although the whole city may appear at Gatsby's door, Gatsby is ultimately a lonely fish in a sea of leeches. Gatsby tries to fulfill the emptiness in his life by replenishing his mansion with "important people" that "paid him the tribute of knowing nothing about him." Thus the reader can perceive that the lavish, but poor, attempts of Gatsby to amplify his satisfaction through money, only cascades his inner feeling of solitude and suffering.
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